[REQ] SULFUR CITY

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Re: [REQ] SULFUR CITY

Post by Monika » Tue Aug 01, 2017 2:40 am

It's open
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Re: [REQ] SULFUR CITY

Post by Argonaut24 » Tue Aug 01, 2017 3:14 am

Ok, thank you

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Re: [REQ] SULFUR CITY

Post by Aldestion » Tue Aug 01, 2017 4:15 am

I finished my CS kali, if you or hunuki could give it a once over?
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Re: [REQ] SULFUR CITY

Post by Monika » Tue Aug 01, 2017 4:41 am

Alright. There's a few problems with it.

1) No one was above the war. It was a draft. It didn't matter how much money anyone had.
2) The war would have been over when she was 12.
3) Because of her age, the whole thing of wanting to be a part of the city wouldn't have happened either, since Sulfur was built around the end of the war.
4) The genetic experiments were not a secret. It wasn't a conspiracy. The war was about territory, and ownership of land. So all countries that were powerful enough had them.
5) Cybernetic technology doesn't exist.

The whole Radio Personality thing is fine, though is there a reason not many people know what she looks like? is she trying to hide?

All of those I got from Hunuki, who's eyes are currently too bad to have been able to post them himself.

The only other thing is that the family of my doctor character, Aoife, were the leading scientists in the development Izen project.
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Re: [REQ] SULFUR CITY

Post by Aldestion » Tue Aug 01, 2017 5:00 am

Wonderful. Gonna have to scrap the whole piece of shit. Gonna delete it, sorry.
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Re: [REQ] SULFUR CITY

Post by Aldestion » Tue Aug 01, 2017 5:06 am

Yeah, I was trying to salvage it but basically none of it works now, so Imma just stop.
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Re: [REQ] SULFUR CITY

Post by Aldestion » Tue Aug 01, 2017 5:32 am

Idk if I'm gonna make a second anymore.....kinda put out now.
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